Reviews for Pretty
VampirePenguin88 chapter 1 . 5/14/2012
I really enjoyed this, I love how you left me puzzling over who or what's point of view you had written. Good description, Grammar etc. 10 out of 10 for you . :)

- VampirePenguin88 :)
St. Iggy the Pyro chapter 1 . 3/17/2012
I read through this twice, so here are my opinions on both of them.

1st Read

You mention innocence, and pure white gown, I think little girl with porcelain skin and fair blond hair.

You mention the danger in the speaker, I think, my goodness, this will not end well.

You mention...spider? Wait...It was a spider the entire time? I thought...I mean...well...I'm a bad person.

2nd Read

You mention pretty, I think a beautiful butterfly with glimmering white wings sailing through a demon's paradise, entranced by a shimmering web.

You mention harm, and I imagine what spiders do to bugs. I shudder in horror.

You mention spiders, and I begin to review.

This was amazing. Thanks!
11's-SevenofHearts chapter 1 . 3/13/2012
I liked this. It was nicely creepy. You built up the story's finale quite well, and the speaker's identity -a spider- was truly unexpected. Good work.