This chapter was hilarious!

The first few chapter captured my interest so easily, there is a lack of description but the characters alone got me to keep reading (Quite similar to my writing style in fact, another reason I kept reading).
The main characters' personalities are perfect!

As for this chapter, I love the way Lily went speechless and 'just stared'. I lol'd.

Chiisutofupuru

I loved every bit of it! Now if you excuse me, I'm off to read the next part.

This story is amazing - I haven't been able to stop reading it! I love everything - the plot, the excecution, just everything! You are a brilliant writer, and work this good deserves to get properly published. Just about to start the sequel, can't wait!

Viv x

That was the funniest chapter so far! Thank you for doing such a wonderful job in writing!

hi,

i really love your story! when i started reading it yesterday i couldn't stop till the end. especially i like it that the story goes on without so much unnecessary text and that the dialogs are so funny. i'm sure without the dialogs the story would be much more moody/serious and reading it woulnd't be so funny. so please don't stop to write on this story even if you have not so much reviews now (i'm more or less sure in the end you will have more than 170 reviews, your story is too good for everything less).

now to the happenings in your story: i pitty lily a bit. sure she got her goal but that he sees her only as some good general or something like this is terrible. and i can't believe that he is 40 years old. in my oppinion he can't be older than 35. hey, how can a man being this old but can't stop to be like a child most of the time. shouldn't he grown up a bit in the last, i don't know, 20 years? *lol*

but i think he is a perfect example for the saying men never grow up. *rofl*

bye bye

p.s.: please please write much more and finish your story and (that's the important thing)upload it too -.

This is a wonderful work and I have enjoyed I reading it.

I love the King and Barrow their relationship is hysterical. You did a great job with this story and hope there is more to read.

I was laughing so hard, you truly did some magic!

Haha! The snake... Lol.

Anyway... I liked it. :) Are you writing a sequel? I kind of assumed since it was 'to be continued' and the seven days are up. If so, I'd like to read it.

I enjoy your writing style immensely and it's rather unconventional, which I also like. Normally I don't like things with such short chapters, but you worked it well.

I look forward to reading more of your stories in the future. :)

Please update as quick as you can please!

Well for starters, the chapters are far too short for my taste because they're more like individual scenes rather than full chapters. But that's your choice as the author and I'm not criticizing, I promise.

Overall, I'm rather enjoying this story. The prologue intrigued me and made me wonder just how she'd manage it.

I enjoy the fast pace and the fact that there is a sub plot going on as well rather than just the one layer.

The relationship between the King and his advisor is perfect and I can totally see it going on in my head. Love their banter. Makes me smile. :)

And the way you ended this last chapter was awesome. I'm looking forward to reading more.