Reviews for If time ran out of batteries
TheGlycoprotein chapter 1 . 11/25/2012
The imagery you conjure here is absolutely amazing, and the variating vocabulary you use is enchanting - for example "Her cute little lips, so vulgar and uncouth", it adds a different element, a different depth to her character. My favourite part, however, has to be "it's just a phase, it's just a phase - they say,". That, for me, was the climax point of this poem, the repetition acting like a bullet to the head.

One word, my friend: Awesome.

You should be very, very proud of this :)
AnonymousLily chapter 1 . 5/21/2012
Interesting- "She writes hatred on her wrist" maybe links to suicide? "Her cute little lips so vulgar and uncouth" really stood out for that contrast. I did not expect those last 3 lines, but they grabbed me!
weareyourworstnightmare chapter 1 . 3/22/2012
wow, is really all I can say. You used a very unique way to sum up the emotion of pain. This was inded quite an enjoyable read!