This is a pretty interesting start and you do well in describing the characters, and I'm curious to see how it all progresses. I can't help but suggest that you should join NővelStar’s writing competition, you might be their next big star.

This is exciting and different! I really like it, it's not like most of the other stories I read.

The mystery behind the characters only adds to their appeal. You write really well and I'm definitely looking forward to more!

Magnificent story. Few are as realistic as yours. Do update, though probably you won't. Still, I want to congratulate you. Autors like you on are rare.

This story is starting out wonderfully. I love the mood you are setting. It's clearly glum and dreary and I see it as being entirely in shades of yellow and brown... The characters are certainly interesting and I'd love to hear the backstory behind Sam and Kyle. Also, good job at creating characters that actually have different personalities, rather than just different functions in the plot. So far, I really like it and look forward to more!