|Reviews for Death|
| Drops of Dew chapter 7 . 5/17/2012
Well, what I enjoy about this poem is how concise and straight to the point it is. This allows for a vagueness - which in turn allows for readers to use their imaginations to fill in the more vivid details of death. Personally, I find the simplicity of the poem to make the effect much more that more touching.
Admittedly, the metaphor concerning the noose somewhat ruined the effect for me, as it feels a little too specific to use for generalizng the concept of death when you have before made it vaguer.
Then again, it is a matter of opinion. I find this to be a wonderful piece and enjoyed it. Please continue the great work.
| militarymoment chapter 8 . 5/16/2012
Wow. I found you on the forum for reviews and this wasn't hard to read at all, but I feel in love at the first chapter. You did a really good job at describing death.
The comparisons are great and just the way you put things for death was unlike what I've read before for a poem or a story.
I'm very impressed! c: Keep it up!
| Rogue Energizer Bunny chapter 8 . 5/15/2012
I like gore. Yay!
| XXXSyxAdeleXXX chapter 1 . 5/15/2012
I loved the concisely write nature of your poem. It really minuses the distractions within text that can lead writers astray.I also really liked your structure. The poem featured a simple yet very readable layout. This made it very enjoyable as it carried a swift flow and was overall intriguing. [I hate having to criticise work I truly love] I would've like to see more use of metaphor as you clearly have the power to create powerful imagery.
| Rogue Energizer Bunny chapter 7 . 5/9/2012
This is my favorite one. I love the pattern, and the message, and just the brevity of it makes it seems so brutal.
| Rogue Energizer Bunny chapter 6 . 5/6/2012
Woah. You're going all meaning of life on us now.
(I like it though)
This is pretty awesome. I bet everybody asks these questions at some point.
| Rogue Energizer Bunny chapter 5 . 4/30/2012
Everybody's gottaa die sometime. People always base what they expect to happen on what they've seen happen, and you only die once. I think that's why everbody thinks it won't happen to them; it hasn't yet, so they think it never will.
| Rogue Energizer Bunny chapter 4 . 4/27/2012
Came out clear, yeah. GO ANTI-WAR! Yay!
| Rogue Energizer Bunny chapter 3 . 4/21/2012
Wow, I love the colors here. In my mind. You know. Here in my mind.
Two things I like: imagery of dead rotting bodies and imagery of flowers. How does that work? I don't know.
Love this. Good job.
| Echo Vanity chapter 3 . 4/14/2012
Wow. This is amazing.
| Rogue Energizer Bunny chapter 2 . 4/8/2012
Love the imagery. "wax doll", "pallid skin", "musk of heaven"
I thought "chest lies still" and "without a beat" might have been redundant. But like I said, I'm no good with poetry. Yay.
This is interesting, though. I like what you did here.
| Rogue Energizer Bunny chapter 1 . 4/8/2012
Poetry? You write poetry? Damn. I'm no good with constructive criticism when it comes to poetry.
(let's see how many moer times I'll say "poetry" in this review... moer? what is that? I can't type)
I love this, though. I really like the contrast between the first two stanzas, because it can come either sudden or slow. And the last one's just fascinating. I mean, really.
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 4/5/2012
"Or slowly, stealthy…as the rattle snake"... rattlesnake
I liked the first two stanzas a lot. I thought the way you compared death to two very different animals worked really well. A nitpicky thing... saying the vulture and the rattlesnake seemed awkward to me. I feel like a would work better.
The second half was ok. Not as good as the first two stanzas. I really wish you had continued with the animal comparisons a bit more. Also, your tone seems to change a lot in the second two stanzas. Very formal with words like "nay" and "shall" and "morrow" it seemed odd since the first two stanzas didn't really have that tone.
I'd be interested through to see what the rest of the collection would be.