I'm so glad they cleared that up! I knew that he was too much of a gentleman to physically hurt a girl, and I like how Randee gave him a chance to explain. The girlfriends conversation was funny, but he made some valid points. They liked his status more than him.

Randee is so self-contained and independent, and it's interesting how she's still looking rationally at their relationship and planning for the future in the opposite way of most girls involved in a romantic relationship. I'm very curious about how this will conclude, because I still can't guess the outcome.

As for your notes, this story is fun, quirky, and sexy. Please don't think that you have to follow a formula. I just recently read Paper Towns, and that had a lot of introspection, much more than this story. Also, dialogue reveals a lot about a character and it's more interesting than exposition that describes a character. When I think back on that chapter in which Randee asked Alex what he would do if she bit him...

That was an awesome scene, and so original! This entire story is such a pleasure to read, and I think your other reviewers have told you that too. So keep on writing in your own unique style.
By the way, I'm really excited after reading that you've got 3 more stories on the way.

Progress, progress! I like your story even; even if it hasn't turned out the wasn't you wanted as in more plot and less dialogue, it's still interesting and fun to read.

Haha, he really does remind me of a cat :)

Yay so glad to see you back. I appreciate the heavy dialogue. You have a really distinct voice and I really enjoy your characters.

pls update soon!

Another interesting chapter! You have me at the edge of my seat in terms of what Alexander's and Michelle's next move is (seriously beginning to find Michelle the most fascinating even tho she is supposed to be a secondary character haha). But yeah Alexander is really interesting because it's so easy to doubt if his actions are genuine or if he's just trying to "win" whatever that means. But then again it can all be in Randee's head.. Considering her past she seems like the type to always think everyone (her included) has an ulterior motive.. That's something you've been amazingly consistent with from the beginning.. Especially under her narration (love how she compared her actions to playing chess). Thank you for your response.. Honestly I'm not that good of a reviewer... I just like to read haha. I've just discovered Fictionpress and your stories here have been a bit of a guilty pleasure. Currently I'm reading Gone Girl and if you want to try writing in multi POVs maybe you should check it out cause the author does it beautifully and the biased/unreliable/clueless narrarators really add to the story. Anyways happy writing and even if it takes five chapters or more.. I'm sure I'll still be patiently waiting for the end cause your story and the characters you've created are just that good to keep a reader invested :)

I do have an account but am to lazy to long on. Loved this one, finally got back to some deliciousness. And I totally thought it was gonna be a trap too. Can't wait for more! And I would love an Alex pov

this is sooooo sweet. omfg. i love this story so much. i love randee and alexander. alexander is literally the cutest when it comes to randee. omg.
i will write a more intelligent review next time lol. this story is perfect. hits the spot just right.

i will take you up on that story you recommended in the previous chapter. thank god for your recommendations. they're so good. they also help distract my wait for love life updates.

He's sooo sweet, I love him so much, update please :D

Wow her hugging him was the perfect response. Actions do speak louder than words.

He's half asshole and half sweet.

I totally felt that the whole think was skeevy, so yeah I'm one if those who thought she was walking into a trap. Really really love the interacts between Randee and Alexander. Keep going with those story, it's awesome. *thumbs up*

You definitely didn't overdo the drama; it would have been less believable and realistic if you did. Loving it :)
I'm actually glad that you have decided on a story that although is sweet in its special way, still brings out the flaws in all the characters: Randee and her inability to stay away from Alex, and Alex and his controlling manipulative self. However you present in such a way that we understand their motives.
BEST CHARACTERS EVER

I knew she loved him to much to stay away. And it's sweet of him to pay for the trip knowing she wouldn't go any other way.

Yeah, I thought it was a trap but I don't think it's your fault that I thought it.. I tend to overthink quite a bit. I'm so glad it was actually Alexander's place though. I think the romance was well written- not overly romantic and mushy which is appropriate for the situation they are in at this point. Maybe something like that should happen later lol?!

And I feel like having his POV maybe as a thing in the end would be really interesting.