Reviews for Open Your Window, Romeo |
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![]() ![]() ![]() simple & sweet story ,just right for summer night read :) |
![]() ![]() the main character is whiny and she's one of those overtly possessive, jealous girlfriends who will one day inevitably choke the air out of their boyfriends haha. That's just my impression but cliche, happy ending so it was alright. |
![]() ![]() ![]() OMG. This is sooooo nice. GOOD JOB. It made my heart do weird jumpy things, and I definitely loved that. :D :)))) I swear, you don't know how much I got goosebumps from reading it. :D |
![]() ![]() ![]() Awww! So cute! Update soon! :P K x |
![]() ![]() ![]() wow i love dis ya man ..dis is so BEAUITFUL ..! well written (: |
![]() ![]() ![]() SO I'M THE WORST for waiting this long to review. My apologies, chickadee. But I'm here, FINALLY, and here is my review of your story: [ I loved a lot of things about this, really. It was so adorable, like the puppy-panda (have you seen it? CUTE). Mark and Ruthie make me happy for cliche romances. Your pacing is excellent; each scene had a purpose and led to the end result, and for the most part, the writing was just as good. There are a few places where you put dialogue tags in when you don't really need them, and it disrupts the flow (i think it's in the beginning mostly, when they're arguing. For example, on the first page, in the fourth, sixth, seventh, and eighth paragraphs, the tags like "I snarled at him" or "I retorted sharply" or "I yelled at him." We already know that it's Ruthie speaking, and we get the idea that she's yelling and angry without you having to tell us, so those tags are unneeded. Does that make sense?) I really, really liked most of your characters. I thought that they were well-roudned, especially Katarina. I'm soooo glad that you didn't make her a cliche biatch, that she was a jerk, yeah, but no more than Ruthie. And how she told her little sister she wasn't supposed to be opening the door shows that she really cares for her family, which is another plus. Seamus was cute, and a good best friend. The only problem I had with with him was that you told us that he wasn't blatantly gay, and yet he cat-walks down the street and calls people "honey". Since he's a Brit, if he gave an endearment like, "love" then it wouldn't be so flamboyant, I guess...maybe...lol. I loved her sister, and the mention of Ruby's friend, Piper. I was wondering when that girl would be making a comeback, even if it is one line, xd. She's one of my favs. I thought Ruthie was a good character, too. For her, though, I thought she was a little unrealistic. I just can't believe that a girl would get so worked up over something so small. It helps that you reveal her insecurities, but to be honest, I didn't like her one bit as a person. I think you should put something in there about how she was cheated on before or something, so her reaction to Mark spending so much time with Katarina would make more sense. Yeah? I thought that I wasn't going to like the dual POV thing, and at first I didn't. But then I read it again, and was like, "that's kind of cool." It really grew on me. I think it's creative and unique and cool beans, xd. My favorite part of the whole story is when the woman working at the coffee shop tells her she made a mistake. THAT WAS EPIC! I laughed, truly I did. Awesome. ] Review done! Can't wait to read Stacy's Mom. Peace out, my sista, and I'll be shooting you an email shortly ; ) |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love Ruth and Mark so much. They're so cute. I will go and check your other stories! :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love it. Love Seamus! I agree with all reviews! This story deserves more reviews. You are such a great writer. :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love this story! It's awsome, and you are a great writer! There should be a lot more reveiws for this! |
![]() ![]() This made my heart melt, and I ended up crying for the love they have for each other. I smiled like an idiot in the end xD You should do more! :D |
![]() ![]() ![]() I think it's cute. And oh gee, Seamus is just the amazing guy that he is. Gay people are cool:) |