|Reviews for Balance|
| TinfoilKnight chapter 1 . 4/4/2012
I like the tone in this. The way that he seems so... happy about it just makes it all the creepier. And yet, it's actually not too depressing... It's almost optimistic. Hey, I wouldn't mind dying like this. (Is that wrong? Maybe a little?)
I think you could've made this a little more powerful, though, by using less summary - there's no dialogue except for that final line, and the description is vague and sketchy. I'd prefer you focused on the birthing/dying scene, livened up the details, and left out the summary of his morning. But it worked fine the way it was.
Looking forward to reading more from you! :)