|Reviews for Hyperventilation Dance|
| Firestorm Nauralagos chapter 1 . 4/14/2012
... my brother has asthma ...
Very scary. Me likes :3
| Rogue Energizer Bunny chapter 1 . 4/5/2012
Internal monologue is well-written, basic idea is terrifying, description is subtle enough. Nice job.
I'm not so sure about the second person: it's distracting and I don't think it adds anything to the story. That's my only concern.