Reviews for The Internal Beast
MyWeirdWorld chapter 5 . 5/4/2012
Tristan is so badass XD just, you know, putting it out there XD

poor Hank, getting facelicked and all by Melissa haha

That Tristan gets hurt when Hank does is awesome. Tristan is still vulnerable for stuff like that and that's good. he can't be immune to everything. He needs a weakness and he has one.

It's cool, awesome, and all that good stuff XD
FangFreakingBleah chapter 2 . 4/7/2012
i love your story! this chapter was hilarious the sorry im gay comment was totally priceless XD. Please write some more!
MyWeirdWorld chapter 2 . 4/6/2012
"Not to ugly either" to kyle? seriously? XD it's too XD

"one."Tristan " there has to be a space in front of Tristan

I hope i didnt miss anything... i probably did XD

Its a cool idea to give him that voice and i loved the gay part haha you're writing is so good
MyWeirdWorld chapter 1 . 4/6/2012
this is good, really good kyle XD seriously. it's awesome XD

" The phone was still ringing so she got up ""a comma after ringing.
Rogue Energizer Bunny chapter 2 . 4/5/2012
Mm! Love this!

Definately a good idea to give the demon a voice. One complaint, though: "Domen"? I mean, seriously?

"I'M DOMEN THE DEMON AND I'M GONNA EAT YO TITTIES!"

I know names are hard. But come on. It sounds way too much like "demon" and too much like a made-up word. How do you even pronounce that?

"dough-man"

"dome-in!"

"duh, mohn" (bonus points if with a Jamaican accent)

-REB
Rogue Energizer Bunny chapter 1 . 4/5/2012
I'm hooked. Update this.

-REB