|Reviews for The Cursed that killed|
| Lia Jenson chapter 2 . 8/8/2012
Hate to say, but you AND your friend neglect commas.
And here: "Wait((,)) there's will be a test next week?" there WILL be a test next week.
You need more beta help or grammar than just your friend. This story has potential, I'd hate to see it get seething reviews just because of the grammar.
| Lia Jenson chapter 1 . 8/8/2012
Uh, it's interesting, but the errors detract enormously from the work itself.
"Grace replied and a sympathetic voice." IN a sympathetic voice, you mean? If you did mean "and" then what the hell?! What is that voice doing, why let it dangle?
"Chloe, it's nothing to be ashamed about" ashamed OF is the more correct phrase.
"I know Jake, but I'm scared that when it happens to us, who will be are next victim?" who will OUR next victim be. If you can't even tell when to use "are" right, I worry for you. Is English your second language? I'd love to advise you if that's the case.
| david the scottish werewolf chapter 1 . 4/6/2012
Awesme chappie, I am a beta now and will beta read for ya if you want as I am werewolf fan wahoooooooooooo