|Reviews for broken logic|
| cab fed hig chapter 1 . 4/16/2012
an admirable capture of the maddening irresolution, flightiness, and nonetheless genuine tension of such times.
| D351 chapter 1 . 4/16/2012
The odd choice in line breaks combines with your constant changes of tense to create a texture of indecisiveness, like you're not really sure what happened. I like it. The lack of capitalization, though I popular style, especially online, in this case creates some additional confusion that I fear makes some parts grammatically ambiguous in ways that don't really add to the piece itself, but that's a fairly minor issue, I feel.
| anachronistic chapter 1 . 4/16/2012
interesting use of tenses and pauses and. stuff. god, i can't word today