|Reviews for Invasion of Robots|
| Anisthasia chapter 2 . 7/26/2012
Look's Kool! update soon!
| Rogue Energizer Bunny chapter 2 . 7/8/2012
I like it! Much better. It seems much more mature and thought-out.
| walls-have-ears chapter 1 . 6/7/2012
That was quite good, the tragic ending was pretty goodtoo.
| Anna Rosa chapter 1 . 5/18/2012
Firstly, just want to apologize for not getting back to you sooner; I've been a little busy with personal matters.
Now that that's out of the way, I would like to say that you've got a good idea going on here, but it's very hard to say much in way of a comprehensive review of such a short story. I, for one, would like to see it expanded into a bigger work; because the image of the Beaker hauling it's broken body toward the man was simply terrifying.
Keep it up, and re-write this, seriously. I want to see more.
| Rogue Energizer Bunny chapter 1 . 4/21/2012
I love this! Good job.
I used to be in a contest where you only had 40 minutes to write a narrative. Timed writing is hard.
I love the last line. Watch out for repetition, though. "The man ran through the alley, getting slower with each step. A sharp dagger of pain jolted his right kidney, slowing him down with each step" you repeated "with each step", see. It's hard to catch those in timed writing, I know. I've repeated the same freaking sentence in some of my stories.