Reviews for Beginners
Neo Rulez chapter 1 . 1/30
I can't wait to see what you have in store rot next chapter. I like how you began it was very interesting.
earthday chapter 24 . 1/24
Wow, great chapter! I love how Sid and Jack were almost discussing what Jamie should do, like he wasn't even there! And I really liked the insight into Jamie's thoughts on Jack and how attracted he is feeling towards him. But he just feels caught between both men! I only had one question - you mentioned the name 'Kirby' in one paragraph and I wondered who that was? It might just be me forgetting someone, having not read the story for a while, but I wondered anyway! :)
earthday chapter 23 . 10/26/2014
Great chapter! I love how you contrasted Jamie's desires with how he was trying to change himself into a new person. You portrayed his conflict about his 'true' identity really well! Interesting to see Sid back as well. I wonder how that will turn out. Really brilliantly written, as always too! :)
earthday chapter 22 . 6/7/2014
Ooh, I love the development of Jamie's relationship with Jack and Ellen! Especially intriguing for him to see the men he knows at the ending of the chapter as well. So many of your chapters really leave me hooked! I love this story a lot so far! :)
earthday chapter 21 . 4/19/2014
Oooh I just loved that chapter name! It said so much about the chapter! What a sticky situation Jamie has found himself in - your plot twists and turns are just great! One of my favourite bits was when he turned over in bed and saw all the posters of the cities, like his future - I thought that was a fab part and really inventive! I'll be interested to see how Jack comes into this later as well!
sweetladyjane2012 chapter 21 . 4/16/2014
Sheila does have kind of a big mouth doesn't she...
earthday chapter 20 . 3/10/2014
Oooh, intriguing! I wonder what is in store for Jack and Jamie! I love the plot development with him going to stay with Jack and Ellen - could be very interesting. Another great chapter :)
NaoEarthGoddess chapter 19 . 2/14/2014
Ooh, I really like this story. Please continue I'd love to read more! ;)

-NaoEG
earthday chapter 19 . 2/5/2014
Great chapter! I love the tension brewing up in the relationship between Jamie and Walter. I'd love to see Walter's reaction to him leaving. And I'll be interested to see how Jack and Ellen treat him when he meets them again. Jamie's such a great character!
sweetladyjane2012 chapter 19 . 2/4/2014
Wow, sounds like a really exhausting trip...
sweetladyjane2012 chapter 17 . 12/30/2013
I thought that was kind of sexy, how they started out fighting and then made love...sometimes getting into a fight does fuel passion for some people. I think, however, that the age gap between Walter and Jamie may be going to cause problems down the road...
earthday chapter 17 . 12/23/2013
Great new chapter! I love how, in each one, Jamie engages with the reader, through the way you use first person in the writing. That's great to read. Also, the tension between him and Walter was tangible, even in a short amount of words. Excited to see how Jamie deals with their situation, and Walter's reaction to it!
sweetladyjane2012 chapter 16 . 11/21/2013
Aww poor Jamie, and after he ate a breath mint and everything...
earthday chapter 16 . 11/21/2013
Great update! One of my favourite things about this chapter was the description of Jamie's feelings as he went to meet Walter - anticipating and unsure, although with a hint of excitement! You balanced that very well. And the comparison of Walter to an old western cowboy was great! But the most interesting part of all, I thought, was the last line seeming to hint at another developing element in Jamie and Walter's relationship! I will love to see what that means for them :)
sweetladyjane2012 chapter 15 . 11/4/2013
Wow, it sounds like you've sure done a lot of research about Hawaii and the missionaries! I am confused about why Sheila wanted Jamie to meet Jack however...
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