This is really good

in this sentence there is a little mistake.

'At this point a\Alex was really agitated, he look over at the clock to see what time it was.'

I don't think you meant to put the a\ before Alex's name.

Also is this just a short story or are you gonna add more to it. Like... Do another story just with different characters and where they live. that would be kinda cool to me. if you want to add another part to this story. You dont half to.