|Reviews for devil girl|
| Faithless Juliet chapter 1 . 3/31/2013
First off I thought that your imagery here was dazzling. "Angel wings" and "fairy dust" are very powerful motifs that are drilled into most little girls from birth. I think all girls strive to be something ethereal and magical at dome point in their lives. I do feel like the latter half is missing perspective. You go from metaphor to the moment: " we all fall in the end" a bit abruptly. I winder if you added some buffer right there it might make that transition smoother. I didn't care for your afterthought in () it didn't seem to fit with the rest of the narration.
| Anihyr Moonstar chapter 1 . 7/31/2012
Made me shudder, as much of your writing does. Hits right at the heart of it all, really, and its the sort of thing that makes me wish I could write poetry. Ah well. I'll leave it to you and all those others who do it fantastically. Stunning work.
| electrical moon chapter 1 . 6/28/2012
Great poem! Love the tone.
| a-perpetual-hiraeth chapter 1 . 5/7/2012
I don't see this as supernatural - more like a sad, inevitable truth.
| a theoretic revolution chapter 1 . 4/25/2012
"shook the last shimmers of fairy dust/off her dirty hands, and/shot a winning smile at you." ahhh, this was like- ajdakjd. ha ha. & i lovelove your profile pic penguins are just too adorbs. keep up the great work. :)