Reviews for That Friday |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Ahhh! This was lovely! I really enjoyed the detail and how realistic it really was :) Really, brilliant job! :) |
![]() ![]() Remember me? :) Anyway, I loved it and I hope you something more like it soon because I would love to read it. :D Hear from ya soon, RecklessFlower |
![]() ![]() At the beginning of the one-shot, you did a lot of telling rather than showing. Like most of up until track practice was all prose. I know that it was supposed to be the back-story to set up what happened later, but a little dialogue here and there could have helped. That aside, I really liked everything else that went on. Being a track runner myself (only for the summer) I could understand everything that was going on. The interaction between Jocelyn and Gavin was done in a realistic way as well. (Although I'm not sure a guy would mention throwing out signals, since he probably wouldn't even realize it, even if someone pointed it out to him). All in all, it was great! |