Reviews for If It Makes You Happy
staras chapter 1 . 10/19/2012
Well done! I like the abruptness at the ending after she considers both ways to escape. I can relate to the feelings she has when she's considering it.. I also really like the fact that her hands were trembling in her reflection, but she didn't even feel it because of where her mind was at, nice touch.
I noticed a few errors. In the 4th paragraph, third sentence, you wrote "Neither or brother or father," and I think you meant "Neither her brother or father." In the second to last paragraph, third sentence from the end, you wrote "her hopes off happiness," instead of "her hopes of happiness."
Keep writing!