|Reviews for BladeArc|
| Katsurou Shimizu chapter 21 . 1/29/2013
Yuuto, you got drunk?! Despite never trying out liquor before? I'm speechless...
There was nothing fun about being drunk for me. I simply got delirious and muttered nonsense.
And those goddamn headaches.
Never touching liquor again.
[While she still had her occasional tsundere moments, she treated me with kindness]
- Ennis, you are way too gentle as a tsundere. Kick the shit out of Yuuto more!
[by being there is enough]
-YYYESSSS. This phrase is full of win. Why don't people who love each other realize that more often?
Miya. TOO MUCH FANSERVICE. My nose cannot take it.
Bingo. Where are my winnings?! I should be a rich man by now!
Just a little feedback about sentence redundancies and repetition. Since other reviewers have already commented, I won't go into detail. But here's one way you can reduce them, take this example for instance:
[I said as we went towards the gondola service. The price was reasonable and both of us could have a ride on the gondola. So, after renting a gondola, I was the one who was tasked to row the gondola towards the middle of the lake.]
There are four instances of gondola. For me, what I would do is to eliminate the redundant ones after the gondola service, since it can be easily implied that they were talking about the gondola. So the sentence would be changed to something like this:
"I said as we went towards the gondola service. Both of us could ride due to the reasonable price. After doing the renting, I was the one who was tasked to row the gondola towards the middle of the lake"
There, you have two instances of gondola eliminated. But you can actually change the last "gondola" to another synonym like "boat" to reduce the repetition.
Hope the advice helps!
| Katsurou Shimizu chapter 20 . 1/29/2013
... at this rate, Yuuto is going to have an army for his harem.
Bird messenger? Crow? Lmao, this is like Edgar Allan Poe on crack. BUT I LIKE!
And having an entire harem ask the main man out for a date for no apparent reason, and on the same day, is a forced plot device. BUT I LIKE!
I know Edge has already quoted this, but I must quote it again. This is so damn true:
[one wise guy once said that whatever that could go wrong, would always go wrong.]
And I know I said that I am cynical, but I'm faced with such a situation, I'll probably do the same thing myself. Not that it's going to ever happen T.T
CLONES?! Yuuto, you let yourself be cloned and let one of your clones be a plaything without knowing his predicament? For all you know, you might get ***raped and become traumatised when the missing metal link is forged.
Speculation time: The five Yuutos and their dates meet each other in a comedy of errors. No... that would be too light-hearted and slapstick. Perhaps something more sinister to do with the 6th, who is the plaything. Come to think of it, is the Qwinn the [Reaper] in disguise?
| Katsurou Shimizu chapter 19 . 1/29/2013
Morgan Fay? Morgan le Fay?
- Nice Arthurian reference. You really have a way with names. Fits well considering what her grandfather is named.
[If you wish to see my true strength, you are free to look at it. Don't be shy. I'm sure you'll enjoy it]
- I read this dirtily. And then started laughing non-stop for five minutes. Sorry Louis, I just couldn't resist.
And what the hell, Yuuto? You lost just because of a seductress comment? MAN UP BUDDY!
Kamui's backstory was heartbreaking, but I would have preferred Yuuto to just hug her in response instead of saying anything. Sometimes the silent gesture works better than any words.
And of course it leads to FANSERVICE CHANSU!
Nice line from Yuuto at the end. Finally, he's emitting some badass aura. I APPROVE.
| Katsurou Shimizu chapter 18 . 1/29/2013
And it's good to be back. Seriously, reading Bladearc once more is like meeting an old friend. I've forgotten how nice Yuuto is as a person, and of course his cute interactions with his harem. I admit when I read it last time, I was feeling a bit cynical because I wouldn't be that nice if it were me. But why judge? What's wrong with being nice? Anyway, just a little ramble here.
I'm a bit tempted to ring up the harem statistics like Edge do, but nah. I think he's doing a good enough job.
Anyway, this chapter introduced a LOT of characters at one go. Yep, of course it's for the purpose of the meeting between the sovereigns, but people with terrible memories like me would have a hard time keeping up. Perhaps it might be possible if you include a glossary or appendix to detail these characters so that I can refer to them from time to time. It's kinda feasible too, since you are writing a fantasy epic like this.
I have to say that I like the drama bits, especially during the end conversation between Yuuto and Liara. It's sort of ironic how one got his wish of becoming a dark superhero or something while the other just wishes to be normal. I can really relate personally because within me, there's a wish to become a popular singer in the region (I'm not bad with my vocals you know), but a popular singer like Jay Chou might think otherwise (Just refer to his MVs which depict his desire to be away from the attention paparazzi).
Goddamn it, now I want a girl like Liara.
| bradpara chapter 10 . 1/23/2013
Hmmmmmmm Yuuto looks like he is buildng up quite a harem here ;-)
| bradpara chapter 9 . 1/14/2013
Ah, Tsundereness is so funny. It try to give a little touch of that to Kimi in my story.
Nice to see Yuuto get a bro.
| bradpara chapter 7 . 1/14/2013
Another story I have been meaning to pick up again.
So he is a Dark Knight, Huh. Very interesting. Also I don't think we have heard the last of the Reaper.
| DevilPogoStick chapter 3 . 1/13/2013
Well, Ennis leaves much to explain about the setting and how the world functions which helps quite a bit to know such knowledge without being confused in future chapters so that's good.
Also, it is interesting that a theory of Yuuto being here is shown and may be even possible.
And Ennis is such a Tsundere. XD
| kingofe3 chapter 10 . 1/13/2013
I knew the Oni girl would come back sooner or later. Awesome she can generate electricity.
| kingofe3 chapter 9 . 1/13/2013
Seeing Ennis act out like that was a surprise. And yeah for a new character.
| kingofe3 chapter 8 . 1/13/2013
This was a nice chapter for character development. I liked it.
| kingofe3 chapter 7 . 1/13/2013
I've read some fantasy manga, but never have I noticed a oni girl. Good chapter.
| kingofe3 chapter 6 . 1/13/2013
A magic summoning tree? Interesting.
| kingofe3 chapter 5 . 1/13/2013
Yuuto gained some new clothes and a sword. I feel like they come at a price though.
| Lord Slayer chapter 12 . 1/12/2013
Nice to have a slow-down chapter for character development. I liked how she tricks him into deciding what color swimsuit she wears. I thought that was kind of cute. Would you mind if I tried something like that in Mahousen some time?