|Reviews for BladeArc|
| Miles Montgomery chapter 14 . 12/4/2013
Been a long time.
Quite a few grammatical errors and a couple of spelling errors, but since English is not your first language, impressive as always.
And Claire...is a girl? Does Yuuto's harem grow even more?
| cud-b-better chapter 2 . 12/3/2013
A tsundere elf who doesn't have too much shame, sweet. When that hooded girl ran into him I was kind of expecting her to relieve him of some of his possessions. I have to say ennis is pretty generous giving a bag full of coinage to yuuto. So it is a sort of rpgish setting what with the job classes kind of thing. I sure hope yuuto stocked up on his phoenix downs, they're really useful things afterall, lol.
Considering the fact you weren't overly keen on corrections I'll lay off putting them in when I review your stories. *Fight the temptation*
| McMicah chapter 2 . 12/2/2013
So if you are a paladin, the class specifically designed for taking hits for weaker allies, you can plausibly wear less armor? Ennis, are you sure you picked the right class?
The class speak actually confuses me a bit. Mostly since it makes it sound more like a game instead of another world, but it's not my story so what do I know? Nevertheless, Yuuto's journey is just starting, so I just have to see what happens next.
| xxxyx chapter 9 . 12/2/2013
Finally, a male char. And it's a perv? You listened to Edge, huh? -w-
Yeah, wth? I almost thought it's another Lord Astald. *shot*
Nice display of emotions...
And you just have to make that scene. Don't people knock nowadays? Or lock their doors anymore?
Forget it. It's Louis-san.
'Man, that was quick.'
'Wow, that's funny...'
Anyway, overall, so far, this is a story with above average prose, above average flow and okay characters. The only thing that I couldn't judge so far is the plot. 9 chapters into the story, and still not too much for me to decide whether it's good or bad. Nothing is jarring enough yet. Maybe it's the pace that is slow.
But this is a fairly good story overall, from various aspects, even if the characters... are not truly outstanding, but passable and didn't mar the story. I find Ludd the most interesting so far, though.
But it did read like a real RPG anime. So, good luck.
| xxxyx chapter 8 . 12/2/2013
Training and training...
Forty bandits... emphasis on forty.
Two people army?
Not too tense for a battle though, the details were a little bit... nothing stood out too much. Except maybe, the crotch-stomping.
A little bit fillerish, maybe, just another day, another quest, but works anyway, in showing how deadly Yuuto has grown, plus how he makes a formidable pair with Ennis (combat wise)... but, is it enough?
| xxxyx chapter 7 . 12/2/2013
Yep, I knew that Death wanted him to be a Dark Knight. But didn't guess that she would interfere directly and immediately, though.
Karma... foreshadowing? Expect a bad ending for Yuuto-san... or at least, an uneasy one.
| xxxyx chapter 6 . 12/2/2013
Hm, your prose is not bad, not bad at all. But the premise sounds like... something usual. But still, not bad. It's still but a start, still beginning, so I can't judge much of the storyline.
Well, now that we know Yuuto's reason of entering the world, maybe Reaper-chan's particular animosity towards him would be explained.
And the worm... I wonder if you'll use it like Puella Magi's Walpurgis Night, but... hmm.
Hm, pace just right... not much to comment...
| McMicah chapter 1 . 12/1/2013
From what I can see in this chapter, Yuuto is in way over his head. But apparently, he has some dormant power that is so rare that he was brought to this fantasy world.
I'm not sure about how I feel about Ennis, but that may change. I'll try to read more when I can.
| cud-b-better chapter 1 . 12/1/2013
I have finally got round to starting this series that has been piquing my interest for some time. A nice opening and good character introductions I'm liking both the characters already and I can already see Yuuto becoming a bad ass character in future chapters. The elf girl whilst stereotypical is still somewhat likable. And a fight right from the beginning. (to be honest when I read the summary I was half expecting him to awaken in the new world in the female baths or something, I'll keep my delusions in check.) I'm looking forward to how you develop this world and it's natives as well as the reason Yuuto is there in the first place. Anyway it seems you prefer to focus more on narration than dialogue, eg putting something like 'she screamed' rather than 'Kyaaaa' she screamed etc, but this is trivial to me at best in comparison to this premises many merits.
Anyway I notice a few errors/places that could be written differently to help flow or make a little better sense (I do this for everyone feel free to ignore what I am about to write):
Apparently the girl with pointy ears wore something like a character from fantasy story would wear
Part of me was wondering how efficient her getup in a battle because her outfit somehow exposed more flesh than protecting it.
...I could see it drooling it looked at us with feral... - [as]
(why hadn't I notice that?) - either '(why didn't I notice that?)' or '(why hadn't I notice[d] that?)'
...pointy eared girl charged the giant wolf - pointy eared girl charged the giant wolf
...she crashed onto a large tree. - she crashed [into] a large tree.
I didn't know where did that come from (and it sounded cool) - There are many ways you could reword this but I personally recommend the following: 'I don't know where that came from (but it sounded cool)'
"I said, 'who are you'?" the she repeated harshly - omit [the] out of this sentence.
And it was the last thing that I wanted to happen on me in this strange, new world. - And [that] was the last thing that I wanted to happen [to] me in this strange, new world.
Sorry if I nitpicked a little too much, but as I said before I'm loving it! (I sure wish I could have just copied and pasted, but oh well).
*Follows and favs and is regretting not reading this sooner*
| Lolitroy chapter 1 . 11/29/2013
They say one learns something every day. What I learned today is: never underestimate the hazard in a banana peel again. Thank you.
Soooo finally got the chance to read some Lou-sama! We got a great narrator's voice here *-* and a perv. Pervs never lack in a good comedy. And the tsundere u.u nice one though.
Anyway, sounds like a good world so far. I hope to continue reading soon. Or... hell, I'll read another chapter or two.
| Razorine chapter 35 . 11/28/2013
Damn. It wasn't Blest. It was Bevelle. *facepalms*
But yey! Yuuto has come back! *fanfare plus confetti plus applause*
Your newer and more refined prose really helps with the telling of the story. It isn't as rushed, and I could feel that atmosphere as I read it. I felt so melancholic at the part where both Ennis and Claire are grieving, when Liara came to see Yuuto's resting body herself, and when Claire swore that she would protect Ennis in Yuuto's place, for him, no matter what.
And then the battle commenced. Despair came. Fiore was advancing, and King Leonard himself was wiping tons of Davren's soldiers away. Scary... and poor Hayate! Just as he was about to deal the final blow, I knew that Yuuto would come and stop him. But hey, even these cliche moments have to happen!
Damn... Yuuto's pretty powerful. And more cool-headed than before. Two high-level spells? Awesome. And how glad was Ennis when she found out that it was still him! She did some tsundereness (of course) yet she confessed again. Wonderful. Though I felt that the whole 'disbelief' part could've been stretched out. I felt that it didn't even out the other scenes where they were grieving, for some reason x3
But still, great work! Yuuto's back, and his appearance has cause quite a stir. Kick Leonard into Oblivion! You can do it!
Will read more once you've updated! (and when I'm not lazy! orz) ;D
... P.S... What happened to Ludd? Did you totally forget him, or... because I still remember that [The Reaper] mentioned that he had a shifty agenda...
Where is he?
| Razorine chapter 34 . 11/28/2013
YOU HAD ME DOUBTING THERE, LOUIS-SAMA! Nobody has ever done that to me other than Dan-chan! ;S
But well. No wonder you wanted me to keep reading... you wanted to see my reaction! Well, here it is! *slackjawed*
First of all, I thought that this chapter would be... disappointing. It reminded me a lot of those stories where they would end with the protagonist waking up from what seemed to be a 'dream'. It irked me, so the intro of this chapter irked me, too. You continued with more normalcy, increasing my dread that the whole what-seemed-to-be-a-dream trope would come true.
But you didn't. And that's what amazed me.
I should've have doubted your planning skills. Introducing Kurumi was probably a good call, and introducing us to Yuuto's homeworld was quite... ingenious. The scene with the thugs was the low point of the chapter, since it just seemed to be another plot device for Yuuto to express his skills and finally remember the High World. But that was essential, I suppose.
Besides, making one's readers doubt them is an admirable action/trait. You have deceived me, mister! xP
[The Reaper] again?! That wily lady... well, I'm glad that she's offered Yuuto another chance. Though anti-climatic the whole thing is (shouldn't she make Yuuto undergo some trial?), I'm just glad that our protagonist will be back!
And Kurumi saw Yuuto's Black Reaper form in her dreams? Interesting...
Yuuto, go and save the world! And don't die again, or I will seriously pummel you to the ground! *is shot*
Will read the latest update! I'm expecting more awesomeness! ;D
| Razorine chapter 33 . 11/28/2013
Oh. Yuuto really is dead.
Well, your writing has gotten better. It's conveyed the emotion more. And the fact that it's told from Claire's point of view... I won't even natter on about the sudden, inconsistent change of POV. As I said, I'd review based on story alone.
Short chapter, eh? Never thought that I see one of those in BladeArc! Although, I suppose that this is more of an intermission. Ah, poor Ennis. Poor Davren. I can't even feel mad towards Leonard, since he let Davren grieve over Yuuto's loss first, which is rather... nice of him.
And that bold text... what could that mean? Is the [Black Reaper] going to come? Or maybe... [Love]?
Will read more... ;D
| Razorine chapter 32 . 11/28/2013
Aww, what? Serious? Yuuto dies again? Really? Really? Just... *walks out of the room*
First of all, yey for battle! Ah, glad to see that you explained the whole mental link thing. I can see the climax on the horizon! Or maybe this is already the climax? *ponders*
Wow, things went hectic. I didn't expect any less from this chapter titled 'The Battle of Davren'. Yuuto kicking soldiers' butts, and Vivio appearing and summoning a giant Goliath. Just... *applauds*
Fiore sure is powerful from your descriptions. Even though Davren is advancing, Fiore keeps raining them with their troops! Is Leonard pooping soldiers out in a magic factory or something? *is shot*
But hallo! When things seem to be failing, even for a bit, the other nations come! Mu, Camelot, and Blest, was it? Go Tetsu no Otome and Mu's ogres! Fight with your scary Blood Haze! And Kamui joins in the action, too x3
And Camelot comes, along with Blest, was it? A surge of hope for the battle! Davren have to win this!
Yuuto challenges Leonard to a duel to the death. A brave but foolish challenge, and one that I probably wouldn't have made. Leonard has a big sword and maybe a bigger frame. And... and... he ended Yuuto! Even with the latter's belief and determination and promises, he...
Stay alive, you. STAY ALIVE. Ennis... confessed to you.
Because you weren't enough of a man to do it sooner. *is shot*
Will read more suspense... ;D
| Razorine chapter 31 . 11/28/2013
*checks the rating* Well, T is suitable, *nods* Just checking because of the content. *is shot*
Ah, so the Reaper Guild has gotten some attention, eh? Ennis and Claire both have respective positions, and Yuuto has earned a nickname befitting his abilities and his outlook. It's funny how talented he is in battle, when he's quite simple most of the time xD
Things seem to be looking up. Davren is holding up, and Fiore hasn't won yet. But the other nations haven't responded. Civil wars, maybe?
And of course, the proposal... well, let me say that Finny's proposal was quite ingenious. Cleverly crafted and suavely explained, and yet... yet... Yuuto declined.
*throws confetti* That's Yuuto for you! No deal can shake him! Maybe except for one concerning Ennis, but that's for another time!
Finny... is probably the seductive female I had confused with Vivio. Awkwardness again... *hides behind pillow* I'm just glad that Kamui came along. Yey!
A Davren camp was taken over? Well, go Ennis and Yuuto! Fight Fiore! x3
Members: Yuuto, Ennis, Miya, Kamui, Claire, and Lynn.
Will read more! ;D