Reviews for BladeArc
DevilPogoStick chapter 17 . 12/8/2013
...Whoa, that's...Extreme.

I get what Kamui is saying but the thing is...She's really pushing Yuuto into something he's not really prepared or willing to do just yet.

I mean she apologized...But I doubt the others can see her the same way again.

...I really hope this doesn't have Ludd involved if the Reaper assessments of him are indeed true...

Keep it up!
DevilPogoStick chapter 16 . 12/8/2013
...Yeah, saying idiot a lot is a tad too much for me. -w-

Nevertheless, again Ennis surprises me and admits her mistreatment of Claire was pretty damn unfair. And yay, relationship upgrade for Yuuto/Ennis! XD

And...Death ruins it by giving a hardcore tragic love story. Yay. -w-

Keep it up!
DevilPogoStick chapter 15 . 12/8/2013
Oh...Damn, at least we know why Claire is..not exactly happy with Yuuto with enough intentions to even try to kill him.

And dammit, how can Yuuto find the right words? Jesus, he's like a harem machine. O_o

And my god, I hope people will under stand Claire a lot better soon...And that Ludd is some sith lord. XD

Keep it up!
DevilPogoStick chapter 14 . 12/8/2013
...Okay, there must be an explanation for that whole backstabbing disorder.

Because to be honest, I'm getting a little annoyed by Claire's secretive...Ness and now that it's revealed she's a woman only wants me to know...What is her deal?!

Yuuto tries to be the good guy, almost gets killed, and then...His would be killer is all nice and stuff again.

...I need to think a lot about this. XD

Keep it up!
DevilPogoStick chapter 13 . 12/8/2013
Yes Yuuto, be a good person and screw what people say! XD

But nevertheless, very interesting back story about Claire. Perhaps Yuuto can convince Ennis and many others that...Well, Claire isn't exactly like the rest of the nobles who pretty much just caused a lot of grief.

The duel was great...Did not expect the blood though... *imagines if Yuuto did something by accident... O_O*

Keep it up!
DevilPogoStick chapter 12 . 12/7/2013
*gasps* my god...A tsundere apologizing for hitting her love interest and actually feeling bad about it right off the bat?! O_o

...I love Ennis even more now. XD

Otherwise, Yuuto is too kind...And too much of a downer everytime I recall his whole "I'm a wimp, I can't do this" attitude he has most of the time. And now...He's finally shedding that part out and is coming out a badass.

Keep it up!
DevilPogoStick chapter 11 . 12/7/2013
And yes...He had to say Harem Warriors. -w-

I'll be a tad honest, never was much a fan of harems since I feel like it can be done very well or in a way very messy with little to no tight ends being sealed at the very end.

...I hope this will be a successful one.

And I feel like someone should have just told Yuuto more about his class...i mean come on Ennis...He would have loved that explanation during that training! XD

Keep it up!
cmaej chapter 2 . 12/7/2013
The second chapter, and already, one of the girls is getting naked! I wonder if Ennis's mumbling is a clue to a traumatized past. To be honest, it's gonna be hard for me to warm up the Ennis; the tsudere character simply doesn't appeal to me.
DevilPogoStick chapter 10 . 12/7/2013
Okey-dokey then, looks like another team up!

Sometimes, I wish Yuuto wasn't that savvy...if that last word of his was sarcasm or just not excited at all. XD

Ludd seems to be a pretty badass figure and Kamui again shows some promise...I'm just surprised over the accusation at first. :3

Keep it up!
Boomer Kid chapter 36 . 12/7/2013
Hello, Louis! I guess I'll at least leave a short review.

The story's still entertaining, with the character interactions being the most interesting points to me so far. Also, your quick-paced action never fails to please.

Few things that you could improve on:
Your writing, definitely. I think that you could use more synonyms especially if the same noun appears in the same sentence and at times, paragraph. Yuuto's narration felt a bit repetitive and a bit overloaded at times - overloaded as in I thought the narration at times overshadowed the descriptions and actions - but I think the writing in this chapter got better towards the end. You still have moments of good flow in your prose, and your writing remains easy to read. Perhaps you could Google search tips on grammar, writing devices and the like.

Next would be my thoughts concerning the story as a whole. I'll address what I think is the biggest issue I have: BladeArc's setting. MMORPG elements or elements suggesting of that appeared very early in the story, so I've kind of been having difficulty relating or figuring out what you wanted to portray via your setting. Settings should be like characters, with their own unique characteristics, developments, and more. I think you're going for a high fantasy world, but the MMO-like characteristics could be reconsidered and revised with more inspired high fantasy ones, especially if your story is not intended to be set in an MMO.

Second would be issues of genuine tension. There are a lot of abilities, items, and events which make Yuuto's journey easier than I would've liked. He learns very fast, his powers are among the most powerful of all characters so far, he recovers very fast, he wins over people very fast, and it's just, I feel that you could have given him much more of a challenge. More rivals. More conflict within the group that remains on their minds for a bit longer. More questions. More things to question Yuuto's capability as a hero. The ride has been pretty entertaining so far and Yuuto does go through quite a bit of development, but I just feel that there could have been more, I guess.

As for Ludd, I think Yuuto could have had a bit more reflections or narration regarding Ludd before this chapter, considering the rather important role Ludd plays in the story now.

Yeap, I nit-picked quite a bit, but I'd just like to end this review by saying that you do deliver on the plus points of your story. Fast-paced action, lively cast despite the harem and moe antics, and a plot that's progressing. Most of the things I commented on could be reflected upon after you finish the whole story first, and then you may do revisions as you please. For now, have fun and continue writing! And I'll definitely be reading this till the end.
Lord Slayer chapter 15 . 12/7/2013
I liked the opportunity for them to bond and become friends. Some parts still felt cliched, like them swearing their lives to one another's defense, though the bath scene was fairly unique in its execution. It's kinda adorable, with just a touch of the risque.
Clear World chapter 11 . 12/7/2013
Ludd should have been a girl.

And every girl should forever fall in love with Yuuto for the slightest reason. I have completely lost sight of the actual plot and only care for this harem.
kingofe3 chapter 11 . 12/7/2013
Go, go, Harem Warriors!
Go, go, Harem Warriors!
Go, go, Harem Warriors!
You, Mighty Sexy Harem Warriors!

Lol, I apologize for the reference. This just reminded me of it. Not that this reference wasn't accurate or anything. w

Anyway, this chapter was done extremely well. I like the action and some of the cheesy dialogue. Will be odd to see how Kamui gets along with the rest of the team. She pretty much proposed to him. w/
Clear World chapter 10 . 12/7/2013
300! yay...

another good chapter with another girl added, yay. More girls needed for Yuuto and more lolis.
Clear World chapter 9 . 12/7/2013
Ludd is totally a villain. That's the only possible way for this world to remain from not crumbling from my vision.

And... yet. Perverted scenes and stuff and ahhh... I''m losing stream reading this. The more and more I read this, the more and more I should just start accepting things for what they are.

Need dialouge though. Ludd and Yuuto seem like they can make great friends really quickly, if only Ludd weren't already evil. I have no proof that he is evil, but I will call him evil until he dies because I just assume he's evil.
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