Reviews for Hunted
angie hofer chapter 1 . 5/9/2012
I like it so far, although you have a few mistakes; in the first paragraph you could put a comma after 'you know', in the second paragraph you could change 'I was being hunted because of who I am' to 'I was being hunted because of who I was'. Just a suggestion though.

In the third paragraph you could remove the soon and replace the bangs with banged.

When they're talking and he asks her if she wants to see his schedule she says no, but you have 'he' there. Thought you might want to change it.

In the story you sort of say that she has had a run-in with the hunters before, could you elaborate?