|Reviews for Controlling Force|
| walls-have-ears chapter 2 . 5/10/2012
Nice chapter, but it had a few problems for me.
It seemed to go too quickly for me, the plane journey especially. You could've described how he looked out of the window (if there was one) at the cars which looked like ants below him.
Also, I didn't find the agent's mistake of cracking the glass very dramatic, you could've elaborated on that in some way.
But all problems aside, I'm excited for chapter 3.
| Rogue Energizer Bunny chapter 2 . 5/9/2012
Hey there, nice characterization. That's what I'm talkin about.
| Dr. Shadow chapter 2 . 5/9/2012
I really like were this story is going... CONTINUE!
| Rogue Energizer Bunny chapter 1 . 5/7/2012
Interesting idea. I like it. Maybe could use more characterization. Your writing tends to be really plot-driven and sometimes the characters just end up as pawns in the big picture. Show the characters driving the plot every once in a while.
Nice job. Looking forward to more.
| JaredDean chapter 1 . 5/6/2012
This sounds like an awesome start to a really creepy sci-fi story. I hope you decided to continue it. Well written.
| walls-have-ears chapter 1 . 5/6/2012
Interesting story, continue this.