Reviews for Fireflies
RedX9 chapter 1 . 5/6/2012
I feel that the strings of "waiting" can be cut to just one or two because to me that part just reads pointlessly lol. Just one or two minor tense errors but it's a good read nevertheless
JaredDean chapter 1 . 5/6/2012
This feels very dark and hopeless. I'm not sure I liked all the repitition, but overall not bad.