|Reviews for Sydney's Fairy Tales|
| InfatuatedCritic chapter 2 . 6/26/2012
Awww! This one was too sweet.
| Aquamouse chapter 1 . 5/9/2012
"It only had three rooms; a bedroom, a bathroom, and a kitchen" should have a colon instead of a semicolon.
"but what it lacked in size, it made up for in see" is confusing. I have no idea what this is supposed to mean.
You've used the word "that" frequently. Most of the time it's unnecessary. It's not wrong per se but it does bog down the flow. It's just padding and filler and takes away from the story. Removing the unnecessary ones would improve things.
I really enjoyed reading this. It was short and sweet. The ending was especially satisfying. I really like how the townspeople set the girl to drift on the river instead of, say, burying her. I also like how the girl and house were connected.
This feels like the sort of tale the townspeople would tell their children and grandchildren, about the day the mystics attacked. It definitely has a fairy tale feel to it. Nicely done. ]
| InfatuatedCritic chapter 1 . 5/9/2012
Very interesting story! Can't wait for the rest of them!