Reviews for The Next Few Seconds
thatsimyoutortured chapter 1 . 5/13/2012
I like this because you avoided cliches and made your own comparisons. I didn't quite understand the, "Tempted," stanza, so I just kind of hopped over it and kept going. The only thing that really bothers me is the lack of punctuation, but that might be what you're going for. The reading went faster without it.