|Reviews for Fuck You|
| Natari Mirumura chapter 1 . 5/18/2012
Wow. I really love this poem and it brings back memories for me. Very nice and powerful, keep it up .
| Robert Orville Berkshire chapter 1 . 5/18/2012
Two little problems that I had with it. First, the sixth line is really long compared to the rest of the poem. It throws the rhyme scheme off a bit. Second, repeating "me" for a rhyme at the end is kind of lame.
Other than that, I wish your poem showed examples of this girl's coldness. "Show, don't tell" is an excellent guideline to follow when writing. Don't just me that you hate a girl, show me why.
| logicloveandothercrap chapter 1 . 5/17/2012
You're forcing the rhyme, I think. There's not much of a rhythm, and it's not very well written. However, I can feel the emotion. Good job with that part, at least.
Have a nice life.