|Reviews for Journals of One Hot Summer|
| allessandria1104 chapter 93 . 1/22/2014
Can't wait for the next chapter already!
| renegade01 chapter 92 . 1/7/2014
Gosh there's so much going on. I like Ruby and Brock together ;-)
| Jester79 chapter 92 . 9/25/2013
I don't review often, but glad for the update of your stories. So many characters interceding with other stories - definitely keeps it interesting.
| Jester79 chapter 91 . 5/13/2013
Maybe I missed it, but I don't remember Ruby telling Brock about Devlin, especially with the whole baby scare. Anywho - it's all good. All of the stories.
| Guest chapter 90 . 1/14/2013
wait until he finds out his little wifey is having a lesbian affair eh? *chuckles*
thanx for the chapter!
| mia aurora chapter 90 . 1/13/2013
finally...new chapter I don't really know who are the perfect guy for Ruby hehe Devlin(nice name) or Brock(nice name too)
| wtf chapter 1 . 1/7/2013
wtffff I don't understand how each chapter or so Ruby says she's a virgin when like the chapter before it says she got fucked why does she keep saying she's a virgin?
| ButterflyD chapter 89 . 12/3/2012
Hello, I think this is my first time reviewing one of your stories. I've followed multiple stories of yours since I did think they were pretty good on this website.
For Journals of One Hot Summer, I do like the concept - the storyline. I cannot wait to see what actually happens between Ruby and Devlin, and whether Ruby gets to stay with Brock for good or not. However I would recommend that you proofread your chapters, or get someone who can proofread your chapters for any grammar mistakes.
Another thing I am not fond about is the pace of this story. It seems quite slow at times. I feel that you introduced too many different character perspectives - for example, I'm not sure I care for Tiffany's mother's point of view at all. I do understand she has some impact here since she's Devlin's wife after all. But I don't think it was necessary to introduce her POV. I think you could have revealed some interesting tidbits about her relationships with Brock, Devlin, Tiffany, Ruby etc in other ways - through dialogue perhaps. A story with many multiple POVs tends to become confusing or hard for the reader to follow. This could probably be applied to a few other stories of yours as well.
It also gets frustrating when you keep ending each chapter with a cliffhanger or a sense of foreboding. Again, the events and the way characters progress feel quite slow, and the way you end these chapters kind of contributes to that. Some of the chapters are quite short and could probably be combined into one long chapter. There's nothing wrong with writing a long story; it would be better to read a few long chapters rather than many chapters that end abruptly. You need to find a better way to make these events tie in, build up suspense and reveal the climax as well as the resolution.
Sorry if this review sounds so negative but that's how I feel about this piece of work. It has a lot of potential and I would really like to see you improve on this. I hope you consider my advice, if not, oh well it is up to you. I will continue to read simply because I want to see what happens between Ruby and Devlin lol.
| JJsMommy29 chapter 86 . 10/29/2012
so wanting Devlin to get caught and for someone to knock the crap out of him so don't like him at all but great chapter and so can't wait to see what happens next
| Sarah chapter 85 . 10/24/2012
I love Ruby with Brock, at first I liked Devlin, but know he seems kinda too dark for me. She is waaaay better with Brock. I dont like Gloria with Brock, he is waaay better with Ruby. Please make them stay together in the end!
| foxyricanlady chapter 85 . 10/21/2012
I hate those kinds of dream their creepy. But Ruby and Brock are so good together. I hope they end up together after all age is just about a number. ;-)
| JJsMommy29 chapter 85 . 10/21/2012
can't wait to see what happens between these two when she goes back to school
| skye real chapter 84 . 10/18/2012
Oh my god, who is this dude? Is he planning on hurting Ruby? Freaky.
| AudreyLove chapter 83 . 10/13/2012
nice chapter! Update soon! thanks!
| skye real chapter 83 . 10/12/2012
I asm confused. Who does Brock love and want? Gloria or Ruby? I hope he's not just using Ruby to 'forget' Gloria and what they had before. It's nice to see Brock's POV and what he's thinking so this chapter was really intriguing for me. Can't wait for more!