|Reviews for Right Now|
| Guest chapter 1 . 10/29
SDaaaamn THAT WAS HOTTT
| Guest chapter 1 . 8/23
This story was amazing please continue it!
| Ann856 chapter 1 . 6/24
Hello, Ms. Pretty Author!
| DoNot3 chapter 1 . 1/31
Loved it & would love to read more about these 3.
| Silent-fart chapter 1 . 1/31
AMAZING ONESHOT AS ALWAYS
| Guest chapter 1 . 12/23/2016
Please write a little more about these three. This book has some awesome smut and Miles is fun to read about.
| Gabscool123 chapter 1 . 12/23/2016
Please write a little more about these three. This is some awesome smut and Miles is fun to read about.
| Lolah chapter 1 . 9/23/2016
| FlowersBite chapter 1 . 5/25/2016
I actually feel bad for Seth, but that was still hot!
| Celine Demona chapter 1 . 3/19/2016
Ok, wow that was fucking AMAZING. I REALLY want to see more with this story. Miles is just soooo my type
| rAiNwAtEr1 chapter 1 . 3/15/2016
Fuck, it's official you've made me a fucking perv. Tell me why I want to see Seth and miles together instead lol
| Philosophy of Slytherin chapter 1 . 1/7/2016
Very good! Ohmygoshyumyum
| darkminathegone chapter 1 . 12/1/2015
I would love it if you wrote new about these three. Just saying. This story just sounds easy interesting lol.
| AnonymousProclamations chapter 1 . 10/4/2015
I hope there is continuation somewhere. Gah! I can't believe this! Loved it. I hope that seth finds a new love that would be cool. Super steamy. I love milesxtyler. But man tyler is a slut. . ..
| AndTheWholeHeartShrinks chapter 1 . 9/24/2015
Hello! It's me again!
Here's the comments I made while reading :-)
[[He looked around my brother's age, possibly younger, and far from looking like he didn't give a fuck – such as Seth was claiming now to my parents – he looked an absolute mess.]]
This sentence is a little awkward, specifically the part after [[possibly younger]]. I think it could be fixed by a few grammar changes like
[[He looked around my brother's age, possibly younger, and far from looking like he didn't give a fuck – such as Seth was claiming now to my parents. This kid looked an absolute mess.]]
[[One hand – small, girly – was still tangled in Seth's shirt and dark brown bangs fell into his eyes to hide his face.]]
I love this description! I think it would be a bit smoother if you added an "and" in between "small, girly" so it would read "small and girly". I'm nit-picking, though :)
[[The little bit of it I could see was completely flushed. And, upon closer look, he was shaking; the fingers that were curled into my brother's shirt twitching uncontrollably as he hid himself and his shame.]]
[[He could tell I was looking right at him, and one soft brown eye met mine through the curtain of hair.]]
I love this description!
Miles is such a dick name. Just saying.
[["Oh... right... I'm going to have a talk with Seth. Please wait outside."]]
Is this their mom talking?
[[I tried to turn my smile into a much less frightening, and more reassuring one, as the boy hovered inches away from me. Closer, that's it...]]
AH god miles is creepy! This set a chill into my stomach, especially with the way you italicized the last three words!
[[He jumped, crossing his arms nervously over his body as if only now aware that he was a disheveled piece of crap.]]
This is so brutal and douche-y that it's funny
[[or rather, my hand was already pressing roughly against his throat causing his nice brown eyes to bulge out a little in a panic.]]
I would add a parallel to this; [[my hand was already pressing roughly against his throat, causing his nice brown eyes to bulge out in a nice little panic.]]
[[Tyler's hands pulled at mine desperately, whimpering as I cut off his circulation for a moment, desperate to throttle out the words I wanted to hear.]]
Really great description!
[[There I stayed in silence for twenty minutes before a crumpled piece of paper hit me directly in the face.]]
[[He shot up to his feet, lost balance, and toppled to the ground before grabbing both of my kneecaps and resting his head on my lap.]]
Lol! I like this a lot
[[In fact, I only had one, Vicky, and she was usually busy on weekends being a general whore and such.]]
I laughed at the "general whore" thing
This was super messed up but also good, as always! I wouldn't mind reading a continuation~