|Reviews for Outcast|
| The Autumn Queen chapter 1 . 7/15/2012
I really like the voice of this because it speaks out in a sort of depressed tone. Really realistic and effective too.
I don't like the lack of punctuation in this because it downplays the pauses - it would be much more effective if you utilised commas, fullstops, ellipses...and even dashes.
I also don't like the line [It seems I am cured to live this life] because it really stands out and in a weird way. I just don't get it. Is that supposed to be cursed? If it isn't, you haven't done anything else with with "cured" motif.
Ohana from the Review Marathon (link in profile)
| walls-have-ears chapter 1 . 5/25/2012
I can definately relate to this, I really like this poem, really really good, thanks for writing this.
| Rogue Energizer Bunny chapter 1 . 5/24/2012
Thanks for the heads-up.
Now this is sad. It makes me think of this one girl I know. She's really pretty and she used to have a ton of friends, but then she was kinda mean or something. Now nobody talks to her. She's always sitting alone. It's sad, even though she sorta brought it upon herself. Maybe it's sad BECAUSE she brought it upon herself. IDK.