Reviews for The Paranormal Side
cypress16 chapter 3 . 6/1/2012

Small things,

That's is like... s/b That's like the...

and old, blue paint... s/b and old blue paint

to clear up m vision... s/b to clear up my vision

also adorned it a metallic s/b also adorned in a metallic

That's all I noticed...

'I have a dad who doesn't really care what I do...' really?

Just comments, as I always say in any review I do, it's your story, you develop plot and characters as you wish...

cypress16 chapter 2 . 6/1/2012

Didn't see any errors. But I'm no grammar nazi, it looks good.

Nice that the friend is deaf. Little details like that help flesh-out characters, create interest.

Tough on dear old Dad again...

Sneaking off without telling him...not good...

cypress16 chapter 1 . 6/1/2012

Good start.

I like the 'normal' people in 'normal' times having to deal with extraordinary situations story lines.

Why didn't Dad butter the toast? It had to be cold by the time she got to it? I butter my daughter's cinnamon toast and wrap it foil to keep it warm. ;)

KatieMichelle chapter 5 . 5/31/2012
I wish I could be so creative! xD

Plasma-carbon windows are so badass. This whole CHAPTER was so badass.

Pure awesomeness.
no chapter 5 . 5/31/2012
I think this is a very intersting thing you have going. Now as for grammer it seems fine to me. now future chapters, i in my own personal opinion do not whant it to go to aleianxhuman but its your story go wild (just not to wild.) i feel like some oe has watched some Invader zim hmm? keep up the intersting story! no
KatieMichelle chapter 4 . 5/29/2012
This is starting to get long! I love it :D :D

Igra's language is a neat thing to throw in there. It's also definitely different how she keeps referring to Dibra as "human". It's great, really.

Keep it up!
KatieMichelle chapter 3 . 5/27/2012
This is a very interesting fic. The descriptiveness is also nice. And I love the names you chose :p

The chapters are a little short and my only suggestion would be to make them longer. That's not really concrit as much as it is my personal preferance though xD

Either way, I'm excited to get farther into this!
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