Reviews for Lindsay and Matt sneak cigarettes
simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 7/14/2012
"She is entranced by her brothers insults,"...brother's

"her brothers mouth"... brother's

I liked the piece. I think it's one of your bests as far as balance between abstract and still understandable (for me at least 'cause sometimes I get lost in the imagery.) Here you have great description like how the cigarette tastes and how she's reworking childhood, but I still get the whole picture of this person and her relationship with her brother (well partially). I also like the ending. It shows almost like the next generation, you know?

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metacognitive chapter 1 . 5/28/2012
Very beautiful. I can't pick out the lines I love most, because the imagery you used is haunting, though the line including the mention of a grandfather strikes me as one of the most poignant. Great piece.
YasuRan chapter 1 . 5/26/2012
'She writes about getting high with him

in the old tool shed, fills her journal

with perfect imperfections, reworks

their childhood, forgetful herself now,'

This one really speaks to the writer in me, in how jarringly true it is, how we do romanticize our childhoods to fit with our literized anti-ideals. Lovely.