What's on the letter! :D

Just from reading this first chapter I can already tell that you're very descriptive with your writing, which is a definite plus!

However, I think it's best that, when wanting to emphasize something, you use italics instead of all caps. Ex: HUGE hugs. Besides that and one or two spelling errors, you did very well. (though I'm definitely no expert!) Will be reading any following chapters! Keep writing!