|Reviews for Interior|
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 7/15/2012
"I was not yet/at that time to the conclusion"... the phrasing here just seemed really awkward. I don't think the "at that time" is necessary.
I thought the piece was interesting. Your descriptions especially in the first stanza were great. I liked the details that made the reader more curious about the situation like why you were in a strange house and whose house it was, but didn't give details. It allowed the reader to fill in the blanks, which I always like in a piece.
The only thing is the ending. Going from the animal to the emotional part there seemed kinda abrupt.
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| Natari Mirumura chapter 1 . 5/28/2012
Nicely done. This poem is lovely. If thought out more, it'd be an awesome story! Amazing job, keep it up :D