|Reviews for Golem|
| Tawny Owl chapter 1 . 7/13/2012
I read this and was meaning to review ages ago but I got obsessed with what the letters between teh paragraphs meant. Anyway I've officially given up now.
I loved the idea of this and the transformation that came over teh golem. Without getting too high brow it felt like a story that encapsulates what it means to be human -like what drives us to create and how things can always evolve.
Your description was really enjoyable to read. I loved teh twist of genes lines.
I'd think about changing 'its' for 'The golem' at the beginning of the third paragraph though, just for clarity. There were some very long sentences in here too which did seem to break the tightness of the piece. The one near the end when the golem has left and the man starts to cry. I think that would have had more impact if you'd broken it up. I think I'm just being nit picky though as i did really enjoy this and loved teh way you weaved the story fo teh man's past in with the present story of the golem's creation.
Thanks for posting this.
| Scorned chapter 1 . 5/30/2012
Wow, this was really good.
It was well-written, interesting, and most importantly, had a deeper meaning.