|Reviews for Holding Her|
| The Autumn Queen chapter 1 . 7/16/2012
I like the melodious tone of this because it gives the lull of a sad lullaby of sorts, or one of those speeches you give in funeral. A nice gentle sadness hull which really suits the context it's in as opposed to something looser and harder.
I don't like this line [Her body remains as beautiful as a swan.] because it's too long and breaks the rhythm. "beautiful as" seems unnecessary.
| Dr. Nonsense chapter 1 . 6/8/2012
(FP is being stupid and won't let me sign in)
So. This poem is beautifully written. I really liked it. Keep up the good work. :-) Oh. You should pm me. Thanks and keep up the good work.
| Rogue Energizer Bunny chapter 1 . 6/5/2012
Another good one. Strong start.
| walls-have-ears chapter 1 . 6/1/2012
That was actually quite good.
| whisper queen chapter 1 . 5/31/2012
Good job, very sad and morbid. Yet the last line...what was it... "I will just move on like a pawn." That seems too rhyme-y to me. If you had said something more like "I have no hopes of moving on" I would've liked it a bit better. (I'm a fan of drama!)
-Keep up the good work! :)