Reviews for Light Outside
64312 chapter 1 . 7/10/2012
Everything I read from you is perfect.
bookppl93 chapter 1 . 6/4/2012
Nice!
D. Rochelle chapter 1 . 6/1/2012
I love this piece, particularly the ending. "i can only focus on your words/and how i can skew them to mean/that you love me, too." I think almost anyone of age to fall in love has experienced this feeling, but I've never witnessed it described in such a way.

I really have no constructive criticism to offer you. This is a gem of a poem, consistent and beautiful throughout. Well done, excellent poem, and keep writing!
electrical moon chapter 1 . 6/1/2012
Gorgeous poem! I absolutely love the first stanza, and 'between the streetlights i feel darkness swallow me briefly' is beautiful. My one suggestion is to use a little more punctuation.