Reviews for Til the angels save us all
FionaBaek chapter 1 . 6/3/2012
I see potential (: The story is rushed, it reads more like a outline to me (then again there is a whole story to be told and you've only taken a chapter to try and tell it). I think if you took it more slowly and didn't "info dump" so much (you explain a lot to the reader rather than just letting the world be figured out by the reader through dialogue and snippets of info through out the story). But like I said, I see good things in your future if you continue writing and hammering out your story. So keep writing! I'd like to read a fuller version of the this story because you definitely feel the deeper things going on with these soldiers.