Reviews for i press my lips against the hollow of your neck
steffxnie chapter 1 . 6/16/2012
Simple but lovely. I like that last stanza 'smile into me. and this, this is everything i didn't believe in, come to life before my very eyes.' The repetition of 'this' reinforces the tone and make it more alive.
Faithless Juliet chapter 1 . 6/10/2012
I like this, but I feel like its missing something. I feel like its the middle flesh section of a poem, missing a beginning/end. The bones and structure of the piece. I also got a bit lost when you used "this" twice in the last section.

Much love,

Juliet.
ensconced chapter 1 . 6/9/2012
Nice! It's very simple, but really good :)

Great job.

Christine
electrical moon chapter 1 . 6/7/2012
Lovely poem! I love 'i'm all electric nerves' and the last stanza.