|Reviews for Wake Me|
| WishyWashyPoet chapter 1 . 6/9/2012
I like this, but it feels unfinished. Don't know if that was the intention, but I need a resolution. "let the whole world..." what? maybe I'd write it "let the angels, let the whole world, hear you sing" And also, hm I see the meaning of the poem, but I don't really understand how that last part fits with it. I don't know, i'm a little confused because you changed the POV a couple of times. "me" "us" "you". who are you talking about in this poem? you, yes? Then I believe you should keep that point-of view throughout. Hope this helps! :)
| this wild abyss chapter 1 . 6/9/2012
[From the Review Marathon, link in profile]
I like the imagery here, it's really great and has a fluid feel to it that works well with this poem. I particularly liked the bit about stars and nebulas because it was different from what you usually find in a poem. Visually, I think I would like it a bit more if it wasn't centered, because it's a little less easy on the eyes, but I suppose that's your choice.