Reviews for L'Argument
simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 7/14/2012
"mouth smelled of coffee and/almond;"... It just sort of seemed that almond should be plural. Also, in that stanza the idea of a strawberry blond sun was an odd image that I didn't quite get.

I liked the piece though. I like how the reader got thrown into the end of the relationship. It allows us to interpret what led up to this and even who is the right.

I also liked how you say you were proud. It could be because your a c*cky b*tch yourself or because this is the first time you stood up for yourself...

Putting the description in the middle of the conversation was nice too. It kinda shows how we remember little things like that during big moments of our lives.

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electrical moon chapter 1 . 6/13/2012
Oh. This is a really well-written poem. I love the way you put words together. However, I don't think this should be rated K due to language. It should at least be T.