|Reviews for Inward Ignorance|
| Erysimum chapter 1 . 6/14/2012
I really liked this. In terms of story, really interesting, I see your influences, I also got a bit of Dr Faustus from it, another mind corrupted by power and pride. The last line is a great ending to the poem, very powerful!
In terms of technique, I love the use of couplets, loads of rhythm and momentum. I do think it could have done with more punctuation at the end of lines, there are places where the reader needs to pause but there's no comma or full stop, which disrupts the flow of the poem a bit.
All-in-all, great job!