Hey sis if u still need a beta for this story i can help you out. ill edit it and send it back. But you should put this on fanfiction and the story you wrote on fanfiction should be here. its an original, this one is a fanfic. let me know.

hey you might want to try this story on fictionpress's sister site as this is not an orginal story but a fanfiction, you can use your fictionpress account to log, please go and look around it's an amazing site

1. This is fanfiction, NOT original fiction
2. You need to get a beta because the writing was all over the place. i.e. bad formating, bad spelling, and VERY bad grammar. This story really needs some work