Reviews for Eagan: A Spark of Pride: November 2001
Dreamers-Requiem chapter 1 . 7/12/2012
Some of this feels a little rushed; it feels, in places, like it jumps from one thing to another, making it a tad difficult to follow. I felt that you introduced the characters a little too quickly, too, making it difficult to really get to kow or relate to any of them. Because of that, it was hard to feel much for the boys when they were lost. I would suggest slowing the pace down a little, spending some time on characterisation and emotion throughout so the reader can get to know the characters better. Hope that helps.