Reviews for The Visitor
Dr. Shadow chapter 1 . 6/27/2012
Cool story! That reminds me of the time I turned an innocent picture of a boy and girl into a 27 page story involving murder, kidnap, a bit of friendship, some very painful memories, and a 5 year old as smart as a freshman... lol. Annyway, great piece, write more!
Appassionato13 chapter 1 . 6/26/2012
I really like this! The idea was great, and I can only imagine what your friend's picture must have looked like. A piece of personal advice though; the ending seemed a tad abrupt, like you weren't sure how to end it. Maybe it's just me being someone who likes my stories tied up in a neat little ribbon, but perhaps an extra sentence or thought on what the watchman thought the specter was would do as a better ending?