|Reviews for this is not going to be one of those poems|
| Your-Magpie chapter 1 . 11/29/2015
your last line. ughhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh. so good. :)
| Solemn Coyote chapter 1 . 9/9/2012
Overall, I am overwhelmed. This poem is fantastic, and I feel like I'm trying to correct individual notes in a concerto when I write this. There are just two places where the words felt a little flat. You have a comma after "your storm is" that breaks the flow, but not in a good way. It trips the reader and forces them to stumble over the last line when really they should be skidding into a breathless finish.
My other grip is with "strong like the winter". The line felt off-topic, but could still connect or feel meaningful is strong wasn't such a bland, non-specific word. Maybe try to narrow in a little more on that feeling you meant to evoke with "strong" and swap "strong" out.
That's really all I got. This poem is wonderful, and you're an amazing talent.
| Love A Mysterious Thing chapter 1 . 6/27/2012
This was comical yet deep...? i think. Lol there are so many ways to interpret this.