|Reviews for Teacher's Pet|
| Dr. Self Destruct chapter 1 . 7/8/2012
The first thing I noticed that really stuck out to me that I enjoyed was how the woman had the man tied up and she was the dom where he was the sub. Normally it's the other way around - or well, from what I normally see it's usually the other way around. But I thought the power play and role reversal was very cool and opened this up to something not many people may have experienced. At least people not too familiar with this sort of thing like myself.
I thought you did a great job getting the suspense and tension across, as well as the emotions of the teacher. You did a great job with the metaphors and the dialogue coming across as very playful - I could tell this wasn't something either of them was too familiar with, so it made it easier to relate to (for me) since I've never had much experience with this either... aside from like, porn or erotica or something. Personal experience I guess is what I'm trying to get at. xD I have no personal experience, though I wouldn't mind trying it.
However, I didn't notice too much sexual description. The tone of the teacher sounds coy and somewhat arrogant, so I could definitely see her mentioning how it was making her wet hearing the pointer hit Kevin over and over, or that her groin was growing hot or something if you don't want to get too raunchy. I guess what I'm trying to say is that while this was a very taboo subject, it didn't end up as shocking as I was expecting it to be, more due to the lack of sexual reference or inclusion. But then again, this is their first time doing something like this, so maybe that has something to do with it? I would have liked to have seen a little more physical description of Kevin, though. Not like hair color or anything, but if he was getting hard... stuff like that.
I liked how by the end Kevin almost seemed like he wasn't really enjoying himself. Although he tries to play it off near the end, I definitely got the feeling he was starting to get scared. I wasn't too sure what the needle's purpose was, though, so I didn't think the ending left as powerful of an effect as it could have if we were given more details beforehand.
Everything else though was great. I loved the pacing and the attention you paid to the teacher's enjoyment. This type of scene isn't the easiest to write for obvious reasons, but I think you did a great job.
| Tawny Owl chapter 1 . 7/5/2012
This made me smile - just a little. Seriously the idea of two people in a student/teacher relationship doing S and M where the teacher is the dominant one, in the school, no less, is just so, well, naughty, I guess. Which I think is what made it appeal to Ella so much?
I think the fact that the they were both new to this, which seemed clear by the way Ella was reacting to the exploration of new power, and the fact that, initally anyway, Kevin's shy smiles seemed to indicate that he was game for it, made it fairly playful, despite the spanking and bondage.
Infact the opening paragraphs did set out why Ella was doing this really well. It made it less uncomfortable than some other stuff like this that I've read where the dominant party can be like a frightening, detached presence. I found it easy to identify with her, even though that's not really what I'd enjoy.
I did get more worried about Kevin by the end - I wasn't sure whether he was still enjoying himself, although the cheekiness of asking for an A for services rendered implied he wasn't broken just yet. It'd didn't seem like he was sexually excited by it at all though. And although Ella was titilated, it felt like the same applied for her too. It did just seem like an experiment for them rather than anything really sexy.
From a techincal point of view it didn't really seem to have a distinct beginning, middle and end as such and the ending did seem abruot without anything really being resolved or revealed. That said though it was an interesting premise and I am curious about how they got there, and where they will go next. Does Keving get to tie Ella up? Now that would be really screwy, to have the student spanking the teacher.
| Zhenny chapter 1 . 7/2/2012
I wish you hadn't ended the story when you did. I am left wondering where that needle went (as I can't quite grasp where it pierced) and imagining the boy's reaction to it.
I don't know if you personally practice S&M activities in the bedroom, but I think you nailed it. Although I am paranoid and embarrassed to admit it, I often engage in S&M activities, and I do not find it to be a sick topic at all. The idea of an adult woman with a young boy is obviously illegal and whatnot, but the act itself of two consenting adults role playing a master and slave fantasy is perfectly normal for the bedroom in my opinion.
So I guess what I'm trying to say is that I think you nailed the teacher's 'Master' persona and her ways of dominating the student. She is definitely accurate as a female dominatrix! Not only that, but it was lovely to see that while she was playing the role of a confident and dominating woman, she was secretly nervous and excited to the point of trembling. It's like she was finally able to act out this deeply hidden fantasy that even she herself did not know existed. Absolutely beautiful character right there. So human. Lovely one-shot. Well done!
P.S. I disagree with the other reviewer. The teacher does not seem like a murderess preparing for the kill, and I see how this act was for sexual gratification and not pure cruelty. She did not want to cause him permanent damage or severely harm him, after all! Plus the student was "smiling playfully" at the start of the story, so it's obvious he was consenting to the act and even enjoying it (even if he shouldn't be because it's his teacher and that is sooo illegal). :)
| Punslinger chapter 1 . 6/30/2012
This gave me a grim creepy feeling, which I guess is to
be expected for those not turned on by S&M.
And I'm not sure that is the right classification
here, since the point is cruelty instead of sexual gratification. The narrator seems more like a psychotic
murderess who enjoys torturing a victim before death.
But you did a good job with an unpleasant subject.