Reviews for double chocolate
Ygg chapter 1 . 1/8/2013
Wow you painted some very original images! Love it how you kneaded them together into an emotionally dense poem which speaks to the heart of the reader. The image of turning vertebrae to braille is stunning. Excellent write I must say!
smoke another grin chapter 1 . 8/30/2012
I quite adore the simplicity of expression in this, it allows, at the same time, easy understanding and ambiguity. Like you're half-letting me in, and then letting me fumble my way to the rest of your emotions.
moon-behind-dark-clouds chapter 1 . 8/26/2012
an unique way of capturing a memory. love the choice of words and expressions. thanks for sharing!
FixitfelixJRJRJR chapter 1 . 7/14/2012
Lines I really like: but we talked about the static in our heads
And all of this: i tried to write my spine,
turn vertebrae to braille
and ask your hands
if we could be this close
without touching.

you couldn't read me.

The ending is really wonderful, and I like the poem's unorthodox tone, and way of telling the story, even though it is fairly mysterious.
lymli chapter 1 . 7/2/2012
I like this part, wow
i tried to write my spine,
turn vertebrae to braille
and ask your hands
if we could be this close
without touching.