Reviews for Limpet
AnonymousLily chapter 1 . 8/7/2012
First line- perfection and interesting as well! Second line- should be "limpet's worries." Not sure about the worries- it moves the poem forward but still not sure. It's a wonderful metaphor, but I get sidetracked into the odd area of wondering what a limpet worries about, lol! 3rd line- like this blend of the inanimate and emotion- how relief erodes when the limpet is gone. That line conveys so much, so vividly. 4th line- battered and smooth provide an unusual pairing- and captures the emotion. It looks smooth but feels (if a rock can feel) battered. Not sure about "sat"- maybe "set" or "held?" The you here is the reader- seeing how this rock provided strength when another needed it, but was left then. Extremely vivid poem- a rock and a limpet to show so much regret!
AppleCrumble chapter 1 . 7/1/2012
Nice imagery! Great piece! I loved how much you said through four lines, that takes a gr amount of skill!