|Reviews for The Last Barrier|
| Skyless11 chapter 1 . 7/9/2012
Hmmm I really like your stories :D They're sweet, and Jayy and Adam are nice characters. But I have to say that there is something I don't agree with. Adam didn't even have a second thought on leaving his parents. Oki, I agree with him that he did, but I don't agree with you killing any emotion he'd have for his parents. I know that in cases like this parents could come to hate their children enough (though, that's not 100% either. There is a large majority of parents who even if they don't agree with the sexuality they learn to accept them, as in "oki, you're you, I don't care any more."), but children can't hate their parents so much. Even is just a bit, any child cares. You completely ignored that, with which I disagree.
Another thing that I don't like is that it's too short xD you should either make them longer, or transform it into a multi chapter novel:D So I can be completely satisfied xD
Good luck, and keep writing!