Reviews for Vanish
ForgottenMemoria chapter 1 . 9/6/2012
I finally got around to reading this! And you've done it once again. I love how you use short, simple, colourful lines. It just adds to the overall feel of the poem. Bravo!
coloradosunshine98 chapter 1 . 7/23/2012
I think you're a really good writer. Try adding some punctuation at the end of lines so the reader can separate complete thoughts. I can't wait to read more of your poems.
NightmarishEscape chapter 1 . 7/21/2012
You really got the sense of loneliness and abandonment across. Rhyming certainly wasn't needed for it to be great! Good job! :)
RinaJewelz chapter 1 . 7/20/2012
Nicely written. Only thing I would have done differently is the ending. I would've put:
That was the day
You disappeared entirely
From my life
Think it's more effective. Anyway, nice work :)
a-creative-name chapter 1 . 7/10/2012
Wow! Definitely felt a lot of emotion. But friendly tip just elaborate on stuff to make it go deeper but other than that great job! :)
Natari Mirumura chapter 1 . 7/9/2012
This poem is so beautiful, and written very well. Amazing job, keep it up :D